Here is a little excerpt of my WIP:
Rachel wrung out a cloth and wiped the little girl’s face. Sparrow
looked bad, an unhealthy shade of green. If
I could see myself, I’d probably be green too! Below decks reeked with the acrid
smell of vomit and only by gritting her teeth could she keep from contributing
to the foul mess. The tiny tot swallowed hard and then coughed, a drool of
frothy liquid spilled down her quivering little chin.
“You’ll
feel better soon baby,” Rachel crooned as she dotted at the tiny face. She’s
such a beautiful child, so delicate and feminine it almost breaks my
heart. Hawk’s child! The result of his joining with Wren.
Sparrow wrapped chubby arms around
Rachel’s knees and buried her face. For a moment Rachel hesitated and then
picked the toddler up, pressing a kiss to the soft curls. Who wouldn’t love
this little darling?
Ashen and
trembling, Wren reached for a support beam and dragged herself from the cot where
she’d huddled during the entirety of the storm. She pressed a hand to her mouth
stifling a moan. The small boys crouched on the floor hugging each other while
they stared at Rachel with wide glazed eyes. The woman reached for Sparrow.
“Go back to
bed,” Rachel said. “I’ll take care of the children.”
Brows
arched, Wren managed to look skeptical even taking into account the sickly cast
to her pale features.
“No! I mean
it.” Rachel cuddled the toddler gleaning comfort from the small body. “I know
how to take care of them.”
Nodding
assent, Wren staggered back to the cot and fell in, groaning as she hit the
pillow.
Hah! One thing I’m better at! I can
handle seasickness better than she can! Not much to crow about but at least
it’s something!
Tucking
Sparrow under one arm, she reached a hand to the boys. “Come on guys! Let’s go
topside and breathe some clean air. The smell of vomit down here makes me want
to puke.”
And so - a name - best choice so far and one I'm leaning towards - Beyond Tomorrow. Pretty good, hey?
Patsy
4 comments:
Wait till it's finished. I changed the name of my first book right at the end and it was better for it. This time I came up with a name too early and I'm desperately trying not to write the book to fit the title
Thanks for your comment Peter. Fortunately the book is almost finished, writing the final chapter now.
I agree with Peter Johnstone. I didn't have a clear idea of the title of my book until the revision when I realized the theme my subconscious had been writing.
And congrats on getting to the final chapter.
BTW, I looked over your stories and saw some interesting ones. Any recommendations, or would it be like choosing favorites among your children?
Actually one of my favorites is The Chalice. I had so much fun writing that one. I also love Absolution.
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